Side Quest: [Lvl 8] Crystal Point, The Wonderful Brightness
Location: Calderock Village
Level: 8
NPC: Heraldry Scholar Bailey
Level: 8
NPC: Heraldry Scholar Bailey
Inconsistency/Grammar Errors/Typos
Description: "You have Crystal Point" is incomplete
Suggestion: "You have Crystal Points"
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Description: "Glassaultmust have not used" is lacking a space between [Player name] and "must"
Suggestion: Add a space between [Player name] and "must"
Description #2: "have you ever heard about Crystal Point]?". There is a close bracket at the end of Crystal point
Suggestion #2: Remove close bracket
Description #3: "No, Can I use here?/" is incorrect and makes no sense at all
Suggestion #3: "No, I haven't heard about Crystal Points"
Description #4: "Ofcourse, I'm expert." is incomplete and lacks spacing
Suggestion #4: "Of course. I'm an expert"
Description #5: His name is "Beiley"
Suggestion #5: Change his name from "Beiley" to "Bailey"
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Description: "If you keep clear Main Questin Althea" is incomplete and has lack of spacing
Suggestion: "If you keep clearing the Main Quest in Althea"
Description #2: "you will receive Crystal Pointas reward" is incomplete and has lack of spacing
Suggestion #2: "you will receive Crystal Points as a reward"
Suggestion: "You have Crystal Points"
Description: "Glassaultmust have not used" is lacking a space between [Player name] and "must"
Suggestion: Add a space between [Player name] and "must"
Description #2: "have you ever heard about Crystal Point]?". There is a close bracket at the end of Crystal point
Suggestion #2: Remove close bracket
Description #3: "No, Can I use here?/" is incorrect and makes no sense at all
Suggestion #3: "No, I haven't heard about Crystal Points"
Description #4: "Ofcourse, I'm expert." is incomplete and lacks spacing
Suggestion #4: "Of course. I'm an expert"
Description #5: His name is "Beiley"
Suggestion #5: Change his name from "Beiley" to "Bailey"
Description: "If you keep clear Main Questin Althea" is incomplete and has lack of spacing
Suggestion: "If you keep clearing the Main Quest in Althea"
Description #2: "you will receive Crystal Pointas reward" is incomplete and has lack of spacing
Suggestion #2: "you will receive Crystal Points as a reward"
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Description: "If you enter Saint Haven, visit owner of Crystal Shop" is incomplete and has too many spaces
Suggestion: "If you enter Saint Haven, visit the owner of the Crystal Shop"
Description #2: "Probably, she has good stuffs" is incorrect
Suggestion #2: "She probably has good stuff"
Description #3: "Any question?" should be plural form
Suggestion #3: "Any questions?"
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Description: "End" is the first time I've seen a quest end. It's normally "Accept Reward"
Suggestion: Either stick with "End" or stick with "Accept Reward"
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Description: "I wish you have great journey" is incomplete
Suggestion: "I wish you have a great journey"
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END OF "Crystal Point, The Wonderful Brightness"
Summary
# of inconsistencies/grammar errors/typos: 6
# of errors: 0
# of bugs: 0
Conclusion
The first side quest that I presume a player will take and it's already filled with horrendous English. Please have mercy on me.
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