Side Quest: [Lvl 12] Black Aura
Location: Calderock Village
Level: 12
NPC: Heraldry Scholar Bailey
Level: 12
NPC: Heraldry Scholar Bailey
Inconsistency/Grammar Errors/Typos
**AFTER MOVING FORWARD WITH THE DIALOGUE, THE [Black Aura] SIDE QUEST SHOULD'VE STARTED OUT WITH [Master Cleric Jermain] RATHER THAN WITH [Heraldry Scholar Bailey], THUS THE FIRST PART OF CORRECTIONS BELOW WILL BE ADDRESSED ACCORDINGLY TO THIS INFORMATION**
(1) [Black Aura] is retrieved from [Heraldry Scholar Bailey]
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Suggestion: "one of the masters"
Description #2: The quest should not start with [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] but with [Master Cleric Jermain]
Suggestion #2: Change [NPC] from [Heraldy Scholar Bailey] to [Master Cleric Jermain]
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Description: [cleansing] and [woods] are highlighted for no reason
Suggestion: Don't highlight unnecessary words unless they're important
Description #2: "bursting from withat the Forest of Death" is incorrect
Suggestion #2: "bursting from within the Forest of Death"
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Description: "I have seek help from" is incorrect
Suggestion: "I have seeked help from"
Description #2: The question mark at the end goes down to the next line disjoints itself from the sentence
Suggestion #2: Move up the "?" through implementing Suggestion #1 (This will make the entire sentence move forward hopefully)
(2) [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] starts talking about "body parts" that the [Player] has no clue or information about.
(1) [Black Aura] is retrieved from [Heraldry Scholar Bailey]
(2) Yet [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] specifies that the [Player] was sent by [Master Cleric Jermain]
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[First Part that should be with Master Cleric Jermain]
Description: "one of the master" is incorrectSuggestion: "one of the masters"
Description #2: The quest should not start with [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] but with [Master Cleric Jermain]
Suggestion #2: Change [NPC] from [Heraldy Scholar Bailey] to [Master Cleric Jermain]
Description: [cleansing] and [woods] are highlighted for no reason
Suggestion: Don't highlight unnecessary words unless they're important
Description #2: "bursting from withat the Forest of Death" is incorrect
Suggestion #2: "bursting from within the Forest of Death"
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Description: "I have seek help from" is incorrect
Suggestion: "I have seeked help from"
Description #2: The question mark at the end goes down to the next line disjoints itself from the sentence
Suggestion #2: Move up the "?" through implementing Suggestion #1 (This will make the entire sentence move forward hopefully)
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Description: Redundancy. Previous dialogue already stated of cooperating with [Master Cleric Jermain] in investigating the Forest of Death and it's stated here again.
Suggestion: Remove this dialogue as it is unnecessary.
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[Second Part that is now with Heraldry Scholar Bailey]
Description: Absolutely inconsistent dialogue with the [Player] and [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] suddenly stating out of the blue that the "body parts will do"
Suggestion: Place a dialogue in between (1) and (2) to connect the story
(1) [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] starts off introducing himself to [Player]. [Player] asks how he can help.
(2) [Heraldry Scholar Bailey] starts talking about "body parts" that the [Player] has no clue or information about.
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Description: Achievements (0) has the close parenthesis move down due to lack of space
Suggestion: Increase the space of the tab
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Description: "on humans and turn them into weapons" is incorrect
Suggestion: "on humans and turned them into weapons"
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Description: "Unlike Ghouls and Skeleton monster that are" is incorrect
Suggestion: "Unlike Ghouls and Skeleton monsters that are"
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Description: "the Soul Eater did not seems to be very powerful" is incorrect
Suggestion: "the Soul Eater did not seem to be very powerful"
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Description: "there are some Ancient Priest that have" is incorrect
Suggestion: "there are some Ancient Priests that have"
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END OF "Black Aura"
Summary
# of inconsistencies/grammar errors/typos: 13 (Wtf)
# of errors: 0
# of bugs: 0
Conclusion
This side quest was just chuck full of damn inconsistencies and errors. It took me a damn hour just to record this side quest.
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